This I Believe (Rough Draft)
This is a very rough draft of the first and second paragraphs of my essay.
I have been thinking about what I believe in and because of my passion for surfing, I believe in waves. I have grown up with all different kinds of waves since I was born. I have lived in Kailua, Hawaii all of my life and because the beach is right next to my home it is a place in which I spend a lot of time. Since I was young my mom and dad have taught me how to surf and the also golden rule of the beach “never turn your back to the waves.”
The reason you must not turn your back to the waves is because waves can suddenly become larger and sweep you off your feet and then sucking you out to sea. During a large north swell that was about 30 to 40 ft my family and I went to Waimea to watch the large waves come in. As we watched we slowly began to feel that there was not much danger so my mother and I decided to walk down the beach to take some pictures. As we walked we where vigilant of the breaking waves on shore and when we stopped we turned around to put our stuff up higher on the beach. As we did this a wave large than normal wave had unexpectedly broken on shore and swept up the beach and grabbed both my mom and I down into the water. We were terrified, I can tell you that for sure but luckily there was not another wave to sweep us further out as we climbed up the beach, this time much more attentive to the waves.
When I was younger I was especially scared of the power of the waves but as time goes on you begin to feel more and more comfortable with larger waves. There have been many instances in my life in which waves could have controlled my fate.
2 comments:
I can see how this subject is very personal to you. I feel this will make a very true and meaningful piece of writing.
Hi, I'm Lynn from Korea(remember the Flat World Story Project?) :) I listened to your podcast of "This I believe," and I thought it was beautiful. You have a great voice(in writing and literally too) and your podcast tells me that waves really seem to be meaningful to you. How you described waves was a piece of art. I loved the stories that you had about waves, about how everyone has their own "perfect" wave, and how much you love waves even though they could be dangerous from time to time. I agree, nature IS extraordinary and breathtakingly beautiful.
I'd love to read more of your writings. Visit my blog sometime, too :)!
Blog URL:
http://lynnh.learnerblogs.org
Lynn, a Korea International School(KIS) student
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